We Need a Makeover

Pimp My Courtyard

This is my rubric marked by my classmate Marvin. The red writing is the paragraph that Marvin marked on the rubric. This is also my persuasive writing about why our courtyard needs a makeover. Click on the rubric to get a closer view.

Outside Room 17 we have a courtyard which hardly anyone plays in. There are many reasons for this. First of all it looks ugly , too many people get crammed on the hard court with crowded conditions, and we don’t have space to just relax and sit down. So room 17 has surveyed kids while, we have been redesigning our courtyard to make it better for kids to play with.

Unfortunately, our courtyard is extremely hideous. Which doesn't entice children to come in. There is a big muddy drain right in the middle of it. This makes people trip up over when they are running or playing. Sadly, this horrible place is also unattractive. The walls are all dirty, because annoyingly, people with grubby hands, wipe their grubby mits all over them. We think that if we give this courtyard a makeover, more people would respect this place

Whenever the fields are closed, years 6-8 have no place to play and then, we get bored. When we get bored, we get frustrated because we have nothing to do, then cannot concentrate on school work. At that time, we have no place to play. These reasons being, is that all our other play areas are fulled with children and, again we have no place to play. This makeover will invite them in for more children to play.

Finally, like I said in that other paragraph, the hard courts and our play areas get crowded. People like us need more place to play in, or else we cannot work properly in class. Also little children get knocked over by the big kids with their sports gear, and like you said, our children need to be safe.

So don’t you think that we need a makeover so our children can be safe and we can work better in class? I DO.

On the Trail

Lately in Room 17 the Wekas group have read a book in the School Journal called On the trail. I have drawn a Motocross track with a key. The key follows the colours on track.

Story Web

This is my story web about a book we read called Amazing Stickers.

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Compensation Stragety

In the Hexagons group for maths, we have been using a strategy called COMPENSATION and this poster shows you how to do this strategy and when to use it.

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Partly Cloudly

The main characters in this mini film are the clouds and the storks. The story is set in the sky. In the beggining of this story all the good storks in the sky have to deliver babies from the clouds. The main action for this story is that there are all these good clouds give good babies and there is this bad cloud which makes bad babies like crocidiles and sharks. The stork for the bad cloud goes to the other good clouds making the cloud think that he is now going over to the good clouds but actually he is going to get protective gear to protect him from getting hurt from the bad babies. I rate Partly Cloudly a 8 out of 10 because it was it was a good story line.

Extreme Makeover Courtyard Edition

Drinking Fountain

In me and my partners team design we have put in a new drinking fountain. We have put that in because our old one is too small for us and our backs get sore. I need to contact Mr. Jacobson or Mr. Malloy to ask if they know any people to build drinking fountains because I can't any cheap prices for drinking fountains.

Smooth Ground (Smooth Concrete)

We have also put smooth concrete in our team design. My partner put that in because he thought that it would be better then the rough ground. I am also thinking of covering the grass outside our class room with the smooth ground. My dad can do it and a little help from Mr. Malloy would be great. All we need now is some cement and we are all sorted.

Wooden Deck

My partner decided to add a new deck to the steps. He thought that it would be good for hanging out if anything gets bored. My partner couldn't find any prices until he heard that you had to hire a builder to build or you could DIY.