Monday, March 26, 2012

SHOW NOT TELL!! (Hydro-Slide)

This is where the picture came from

Sliding rapidly, zooming in the swirling water, I was twisting and turning down the dark tunnel. The swirling water, propelled me into the pitch black hole. I was going towards a bit of light and knew that it was going to end. SPLASH!! and I was out.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Crusader,
    Well done. You used lots of interesting vocab as well as varied sentence beginning. Your picture is fantastic. It goes well with your writing. Keep up the awesome work Crusader.



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